A song I wrote Opinions appreciated

I am in a band and I just finished writing the lyrics to this song and needed some feedback:

SAVE ME

(Verse 1)
I cant believe from what I see,
This Life I live is killing me,
There is no secret I dont forgive and I dont forget,
You lied to me this tragedy
Society gives no sympathy
So I ask you..............

(Chorus)
Who's gonna save me?
Lifetime of agony, no one to set me free,
Who's gonna save me?
Before my past destroys me
Who has the answers?

(verse 2)
My walls are closing in,
Deeper and deeper I sink, Deeper and Deeper I sink
Why won't you let me inside
You can run but you can't hide,
You lock me up all the time,
So I ask you...........

(Chorus)
Who's gonna save me?
Lifetime of agony, no one to set me free,
Who's gonna save me?
Before my past destroys me
Who has the answers?


(Bridge)
I stand alone
on this dark and lonely road, looking off in the distance
As my past has shown,
I bare no resistance,
The beating sun gives no assistance,
As I wander through the unknown

(Chorus 2 times)

So I ask you......................

What do you guys think?

I know it might seem dark but its not and we are in the process of writing the music to it now.

Of course I love it.

Rock band right? Any kinda of genre in particular? Alternative? Nu-Metal? Ya know what I mean. :D

Once you put it to music, I'll send you my email address, so you can be sure to send it to me.

Of course I love it.

Rock band right? Any kinda of genre in particular? Alternative? Nu-Metal? Ya know what I mean. :D

Once you put it to music, I'll send you my email address, so you can be sure to send it to me.


Alternative we are doing that right now

I am the bass player in this band in case anyone was wondering.

I agree with DynamiteRave, it does sound like a metal tune. Would love to hear it with some music.

I agree with DynamiteRave, it does sound like a metal tune. Would love to hear it with some music.


as soon as we finish that part i will put it up

I like it. I look forward to hearing it with music. What's the name of your band?

I like it. I look forward to hearing it with music. What's the name of your band?


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I am in a band and I just finished writing the lyrics to this song and needed some feedback:

SAVE ME

(Verse 1)
I cant believe from what I see,
This Life I live is killing me,
There is no secret I dont forgive and I dont forget,
You lied to me this tragedy
Society gives no sympathy
So I ask you..............

(Chorus)
Who's gonna save me?
Lifetime of agony, no one to set me free,
Who's gonna save me?
Before my past destroys me
Who has the answers?

(verse 2)
My walls are closing in,
Deeper and deeper I sink, Deeper and Deeper I sink
Why won't you let me inside
You can run but you can't hide,
You lock me up all the time,
So I ask you...........

(Chorus)
Who's gonna save me?
Lifetime of agony, no one to set me free,
Who's gonna save me?
Before my past destroys me
Who has the answers?


(Bridge)
I stand alone
on this dark and lonely road, looking off in the distance
As my past has shown,
I bare no resistance,
The beating sun gives no assistance,
As I wander through the unknown

(Chorus 2 times)

So I ask you......................


What do you guys think?

Sorry, I am so old, that if it isn't from Bill Haley and the Comets, I don't get it... that kid Elvis had some interesting stuff though :headbange